The Red Pen

I’ll get this right if it kills me.

“From there the conversation drifted off to other topics and after a brief time Ginny offered some excuse as to why she had to be leaving and after thanking them for their time she hurried out the door.”

Thirty-eight words, no punctuation. Three FOUR betas missed this?

So you thought the last run-on sentence was bad?

Original text: “Laura helped me to face my problems and comprehend that I treated you the way I did because deep inside I had developed a [sic] abhorrence of women; [sic] in all probability because of the way my grandmother had treated me as a child.” Yes, that was supposed to be dialogue. Spoken by Neville Longbottom. *facepalm*

Blame Reasoning with Vampires for this.

Original sentence: “Emily hesitated only momentarily before running to the bedroom she shared with Caitlin who was on her heels.” From the badfic Hogwarts Exposed.